Those blasted blurbs again!

I'm working on another blurb. This is for NEW TRICKS, the BDSM story I just sent for the Phaze anthology. Let me know what you think of it? Does it get your interest? Would you want to read this? Anything I should change, or add that you don't see here? Also, Broad Horizons is a BDSM club where all the stories are set, which would be clear to anyone reading the blurb on the antho sell page… but I've got a second version where's more specific.

2nd draft,:
hopefully addressing pronoun issues….

Skeptical and straight-laced Blake isn't so sure about attending Broad Horizons' Christmas Eve Party. He's never gone in for any of that kink, but he wants to humor Jay as they spend their first Christmas together. Despite his initial aversion, Blake's powerfully drawn to the scene and eager to experiment. After Jay reveals a hidden secret from his past, he gives in to Blake's request to play, and in the end receives a gift more precious than he ever expected.

Another version (differences in purple)

Skeptical and straight-laced Blake isn't so sure about attending a Christmas Eve Party at a BDSM club. He's never gone in for any of that kink, but he wants to humor Jay as they spend their first Christmas together. Despite his initial aversion, Blake's powerfully drawn to the scene and eager to experiment. After Jay reveals a hidden secret from his past, he gives in to Blake's request to play, and in the end receives a gift more precious than he ever expected.

All comments and suggestions are greatly appreciated.

1st draft

Skeptical and straight-laced Blake isn't so sure about attending Broad Horizons' Christmas Eve Party. He's never gone in for any of that kink, but he wants to humor Jay as they spend their first Christmas together. Despite his initial aversion, he's powerfully drawn to the scene and eager to experiment. After Jay reveals a hidden secret from his past, he's willing to play, and in the end Jay receives a gift more precious than he ever expected.