Need some feedback on blurbs [friends only]

I'm working on the blurbs for my Cobblestone release and I'd love to get some comments/critique from my flist. Please let me know whether you like it or not and what I should change.

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I need 4 different ones of different lengths: 100, 50, 25 & 12 words! I'm freaking out. It's hard enough to write one.  Thank you in advance!

100 words
Drake Talbott is a young university professor with a big secret: he's been dating a student. Hunky, handsome Kerry Monroe isn't in any of Drake's classes, but he has a public sex kink that Drake is in no particular hurry to curb. In fact Kerry's brought out a wilder side of Drake that he never knew he possessed. When an extracurricular tryst in the library stacks nearly brings their relationship to the attention of the powers that be at the university, Drake's just not sure whether his career will survive Kerry's appetites–or his own.

50 words

Drake Talbott is a young university professor with a big secret: he's been dating a student. Hunky, handsome Kerry Monroe isn't in any of Drake's classes, but he has a public sex kink that Drake is in no particular hurry to curb. He's just not sure whether his career will survive Kerry's appetites–or his own.

25 words

Professor Drake Talbott finds boyfriend Kerry's public sex kink hot, but after an on-campus tryst in the library he wonders if his career can survive the heat.

12-ish words
Secret boyfriend with a public-sex kink—a combustible combination for Professor Drake Talbott

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