{"id":229,"date":"2009-05-14T09:58:00","date_gmt":"2009-05-14T17:58:00","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/?p=229"},"modified":"2009-05-14T09:58:00","modified_gmt":"2009-05-14T17:58:00","slug":"feedback-request-another-day-another-blurb","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/feedback-request-another-day-another-blurb\/","title":{"rendered":"FEEDBACK REQUEST: Another day another blurb"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>I&nbsp;got some great feedback when I&nbsp;was working on blurbs the other day and I&nbsp;want to again thank everyone that commented. It was a huge help to me!<img data-recalc-dims=\"1\" decoding=\"async\" border=\"1\" src=\"https:\/\/i0.wp.com\/c2.gostats.com\/bin\/count\/a_618643\/t_5\/i_1\/counter.png\" alt=\"\" \/><\/p>\n<p>I&apos;m working on another blurb today for a story that&apos;s going to be in an anthology as well as released as a stand-alone, so it needs to be good enough to actually get people to buy it for its own appeal.<\/p>\n<p>It&apos;s for VENUS&nbsp;ENVY. Here&apos;s what&nbsp;I&apos;ve got so far:<\/p>\n<div style=\"margin-left: 40px;\">Sancus, Roman God of Loyalty and Honesty, snubs an advance from Venus. Irate,&nbsp;the Goddess of Love&nbsp;convinces Cupid to&nbsp;cast a curse on Sancus. As a result, Sancus is unable to perform with women, but finds himself attracted to every <span>hot guy<\/span> he meets. In fact, he can&apos;t say no. There&apos;s only one way to end the curse, but it&apos;s up to Sancus to untangle the finely-woven threads and discover it&apos;s actually a&nbsp;love spell.<br \/>&nbsp;<\/div>\n<div style=\"margin-left: 40px;\"><meta content=\"text\/html; charset=utf-8\" http-equiv=\"Content-Type\"><\/meta><meta content=\"Word.Document\" name=\"ProgId\"><\/meta><meta content=\"Microsoft Word 10\" name=\"Generator\"><\/meta><meta content=\"Microsoft Word 10\" name=\"Originator\"><link href=\"file:\/\/\/C:\\DOCUME~1\\HP_ADM~1\\LOCALS~1\\Temp\\msohtml1\\01\\clip_filelist.xml\" rel=\"File-List\" \/><!--[if gte mso 9]><xml>\n <w :WordDocument>\n  <\/w><w :View>Normal<\/w>\n  <w :Zoom>0<\/w>\n  <w :Compatibility>\n   <w :BreakWrappedTables \/>\n   <w :SnapToGridInCell \/>\n   <w :WrapTextWithPunct \/>\n   <w :UseAsianBreakRules \/>\n  <\/w>\n  <w :BrowserLevel>MicrosoftInternetExplorer4<\/w>\n \n<\/xml>< ![endif]--><\/p>\n<style type=\"text\/css\">\n<!--\n \/* Style Definitions *\/\n p.MsoNormal, li.MsoNormal, div.MsoNormal\n\t{mso-style-parent:\"\";\n\tmargin:0in;\n\tmargin-bottom:.0001pt;\n\tmso-pagination:widow-orphan;\n\tfont-size:12.0pt;\n\tfont-family:\"Times New Roman\";\n\tmso-fareast-font-family:\"Times New Roman\";}\n@page Section1\n\t{size:8.5in 11.0in;\n\tmargin:1.0in 1.25in 1.0in 1.25in;\n\tmso-header-margin:.5in;\n\tmso-footer-margin:.5in;\n\tmso-paper-source:0;}\ndiv.Section1\n\t{page:Section1;}\n-->\n<\/style>\n<p><!--[if gte mso 10]>\n\n\n<style>\n \/* Style Definitions *\/\n table.MsoNormalTable\n\t{mso-style-name:\"Table Normal\";\n\tmso-tstyle-rowband-size:0;\n\tmso-tstyle-colband-size:0;\n\tmso-style-noshow:yes;\n\tmso-style-parent:\"\";\n\tmso-padding-alt:0in 5.4pt 0in 5.4pt;\n\tmso-para-margin:0in;\n\tmso-para-margin-bottom:.0001pt;\n\tmso-pagination:widow-orphan;\n\tfont-size:10.0pt;\n\tfont-family:\"Times New Roman\";}\n<\/style>\n\n\n< ![endif]--><\/meta><\/div>\n<p class=\"MsoNormal\">&nbsp;<\/p>\n<p><lj -cut text=\"2 slight variations...\"><\/p>\n<p class=\"MsoNormal\">In this version, the love interest is mentioned:<\/p>\n<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"margin-left: 40px;\">Sancus, Roman God of Loyalty and Honesty, snubs an advance from Venus. Irate,&nbsp;the Goddess of Love&nbsp;convinces Cupid to&nbsp;cast a curse on Sancus. As a result, Sancus is unable to perform with women, but finds himself attracted to every <span style=\"-moz-background-clip: -moz-initial; -moz-background-origin: -moz-initial; -moz-background-inline-policy: -moz-initial; background-attachment: scroll;\">hot guy<\/span> he meets. In fact, he can&apos;t say no. During a week of almost non-stop arousal and sex Sancus meets Aurelio, a mortal that he actually likes enough to see again, but he&apos;s afraid until the curse is lifted he needs to stay away or risk ruining the chance of something more. There&apos;s only one way to end the curse, but it&apos;s up to Sancus to untangle the finely-woven threads and discover it&apos;s actually a&nbsp;love spell.<o :p><\/o><\/p>\n<div style=\"margin-left: 80px;\">&nbsp;How does it sound?&nbsp;Too long, too short? Poorly worded? <\/p>\n<p>Here&apos;s a slightly different version that just mentions a mortal, not saying if male or female:<\/p>\n<div style=\"margin-left: 40px;\">Sancus, Roman God of Loyalty and Honesty, snubs an advance from Venus. Irate,&nbsp;the Goddess of Love&nbsp;convinces Cupid to&nbsp;cast a curse on Sancus. As a result, Sancus is unable to perform with women, but finds himself attracted to every <span>hot guy<\/span> he meets. In fact, he can&apos;t say no. During a week of almost non-stop arousal and sex Sancus meets a mortal that he actually likes enough to see again, but he&apos;s afraid until the curse is lifted he needs to stay away or risk ruining the chance of something more. There&apos;s only one way to end the curse, but it&apos;s up to Sancus to untangle the finely-woven threads and discover it&apos;s actually a&nbsp;love spell.<\/div>\n<\/div>\n<p><\/lj><\/p>\n<div style=\"margin-left: 40px;\">&nbsp;<\/div>\n<p>  Any suggestions gratefully accepted!<\/p>\n<p><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>I&nbsp;got some great feedback when I&nbsp;was working on blurbs the other day and I&nbsp;want to again thank everyone that commented. It was a huge help to me! I&apos;m working on another blurb today for a story that&apos;s going to be in an anthology as well as released as a stand-alone, so it needs to be [&hellip;]<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":63,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"jetpack_post_was_ever_published":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_access":"","_jetpack_dont_email_post_to_subs":false,"_jetpack_newsletter_tier_id":0,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paywalled_content":false,"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":"","jetpack_publicize_message":"","jetpack_publicize_feature_enabled":true,"jetpack_social_post_already_shared":false,"jetpack_social_options":{"image_generator_settings":{"template":"highway","default_image_id":0,"font":"","enabled":false},"version":2}},"categories":[1],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-229","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-uncategorized"],"jetpack_publicize_connections":[],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"jetpack_shortlink":"https:\/\/wp.me\/pzLgx-3H","jetpack_likes_enabled":true,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/229","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/63"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=229"}],"version-history":[{"count":0,"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/229\/revisions"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=229"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=229"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.emlynley.com\/blog\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=229"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}